The Murky Shallows of Life (a belated Weekly Prompt poem for 17th November)

The Murky Shallows of Life

The first time that she saw him

He was standing alone on the pier,

He began to walk, so desolate

A stranger, a no one, it would appear.


The second time that she saw him,

He was alone again in the woods.

His desolation ever deeper,

To reach him, she wished that she could.


And then she saw him again,

Alone on the shallows of the shore,

Staring out at the ocean unseeing,

As if he cared no longer, no more.


And this time she approached him,

Traced his footsteps in the sand with her own,

Meeting him at the edge of the crested waves,

Asking him the question, who was he? where did he call home?


Startled at first he stuttered,

His fragility, delicate as the arm of a tree.

Its bough bracing the wind, yet un-breaking,

And she felt his urge – that he wanted to be free.


The webs of deceit and desire,

Had him firmly enmeshed in their devilish hold,

And now alone, he had no choice but to journey,

To find the release, so craved since days of old.


She understood this deceit and desire,

How he had come to be tangled and torn,

How his bough had become fragile and damaged,

How his face had gained tired lines, ever worn.


 They shared a final weighted look,

She firmly bound by his spell,

As a cobweb, powerless on the branch,

Their future, two ways; one leading to hell.


Feet shuffled towards the tide,

In synchronisation they moved ahead,

But just as the water lapped higher,

They turned as one, hands grasped, retreating instead.


They ran together, feet suddenly light,

Exiting the brown and murky shallows,

Shaking off the cold, the deceit and despair,

Beginning their lives again, no more time to wallow.


© Jade Reyner 2013

About Jade Reyner

I am on a huge writing journey. I started my first novel just over two years ago and I am now proud to say that I have written nearly three. My dream is to become a published author and I am now working very hard, along with an editor, to accomplish that goal. Other than writing I love my family, cats and chocolate! Feel free to say Hi! :-)

16 comments on “The Murky Shallows of Life (a belated Weekly Prompt poem for 17th November)

  1. Reblogged this on Jade's Jungle and commented:

    A poem for a Sunday. Would love your thoughts on this, I am finding that I like writing this style of poem but have no idea if I am any good at it or not! Thank you!

  2. You tell a great story through this. Love poems that do that.

  3. That’s a really lovely, touching poem Jade . You write so well and this is obviously heartfelt. Looking forward to reading more of your poems soon.x

    • Aw, thank you Elaine, that is really kind of you. I sort of dabble in poetry, don’t really know what I am doing! I have your email and will write back, I promise! Sorry. Been mega busy trying to get editing done! 🙂

  4. This has such a good flow through the story, really good 🙂

  5. Lovely take on the prompt, Jade! I love how you wove in the web (no pun intended) but it definitely stands well on its own. Hope we see more from you 🙂

  6. Jade,
    Your words took me deeper and deeper into their world…please just admit that you are a poet! This was excellent.

    • Thank you Patti, that is so kind of you. I really appreciate your words.

      I was quite proud of this one when I wrote it although I read it to hubby and he was like… what??! Hmm… methinks he is not with the programme quite yet!

      Hope you are well?

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